Great news on the development of our idea

Ok this post is just to show everyone the document we sent out a while back talking about our music video and what we might do within it.

As you can see below we marked out what we wanted to do and then we listed it on a document and got some feedback:

Video idea by Liam homer and Brocken rose

Below is a list of all the events that happen in our video, and we would like feedback from you, so if you wouldn't mind just giving us your thoughts on the plan so far, thank you very much.

Boy and girl in house/shop/pub/other location

Flirty text/phone call from another girl

Girl reads text/gets on the phone and has a go at the boy

Girl slaps boy in face

Girl storms out of house/shop/pub/room/mode of transport

Boy looks confused

Girl tries to stubbornly bottle her emotions inside her

Girl about to breakdown

Girl takes tissue out of pocket and wipes her eyes

Girl walks to the Park/retail Park or other location and sits on bench

Girl has flashback of happy memories with boy and the same happens to boy but he remember the good times with the girl

Boy outside pub or other location with phone

Boy texts/calls girl asking where she is

Boy then heads to a store and walks out with a wrapped box or he has it in some location near to him

Boy walks to the girl’s location with a gift

Boy spots girl

Boy sits next to or awkwardly stands by the girl with the gift and gives it to her

Girl opens gift

Girl laughs/smiles

Boy and girl kiss/hug/laugh together

Boy and girl walk off holding hands into the sunset, or just walk off

Please comment on the back of the page

After this we got some really good feedback, some of the comments given to us were immensely helpful, one comment said that the ending was too cliche and that whilst the happy ending was good, it could do with a shock twist or something, so me and liam took that to heart and said the ending should have a mild alteration, but then said how about if instead of them getting back together she laughs and then walks off and he should collapse down or sit down looking down-trodden and then someone puts their hand on his shoulder, which could be anyone(as we would like to leave it up to the audience to think whose hand it could be, however only me and liam know whose hand it is)